Triolet

[avevale_intelligencer]

Another one from the vaults:

The owls were calling in the trees.
As you and I touched hands and parted,
The owls were calling. In the trees,
The fretful moonlight flinched and started
Like the prey whom, tender-hearted,
The owls were calling in. The trees,
As you and I, touched hands and parted.

Comments

[alyramoondancer.livejournal.com]

I love that. That's the second of that form I've seen from you; do you have any more?

[zanda-myrande.livejournal.com]

Not good enough to show.

[soren-nyrond.livejournal.com]

Lovely, and catches what (I assume) the form is meant to be about.

[bardling.livejournal.com]

Oh, that is lovely. Thank you for sharing! *hug* :)

[mbumby.livejournal.com]

Very nice.

[patoadam]

Superb!

I have attempted the form, so I know how difficult it is to get different shades of meaning into the repeated lines.

I haven't seen your other triolet. Could you be persuaded to post it?

[zanda-myrande.livejournal.com]

It's on Wassaliens.

Now, as shadows fall,
My dreams come back to me
Now as shadows. Fall
Colours all I see
With mortality.
Now, as shadows, fall
My dreams: come back to me.

[patoadam]

Thanks!

[pbristow.livejournal.com]

Lovely. =:o}

[batyatoon]

Beautiful. I particularly like the repunctuation to make the same line mean three different things. *admires*