"Obviously wrong" is an objective judgment, and fair enough; "silly" is a subjective opinion

I'll get back to this some other time, because the other thing I really noticed was this:

every so often a great jagged spar of reality bursts through and rips the good to shreds

This statement implies that what is good in your life is not real, and what is real in your life rips your happiness to shreds. I'm sorry to disagree with you, but this looks pretty bleak to me. I wish your life was better than this.